Native American Genocide vs Other Definitions

I already have written my essay but it needs fine tuning. I have attached it and this is her comments to correct it.

The thesis is not entirely clear; please state it more explicitly.
I see that you have put some of your directly sourced material in quotations; it’s also important to use an in-text citation to show which source it is from.
Because you haven’t used the in-text citations, it’s hard for me to comment on the different perspectives and on the synthesis aspect of your paper.
As I get to the end of your paper, I think your thesis has to do with establishing a memorial to Wounded Knee. (I seem to remember this from a discussion or from your AB paper.) This should be clear from the onset and supported throughout your paper. 

My thesis would be that what happened to them was genocide and not the other definitions in the paper.