P.I.E. Structure

Teacher’s Instructions: Write and submit a strongP.I.E. paragraph, in which you discuss a couple of the themes from the ThemesChart. The Point/Topic Sentence should discuss what the themes show us aboutthe meaning of the memoir, and the Information/Evidence should include quotesthat reflect the themes, cited in MLA Style. Label each section as”P,” “I,” and “E,” so that it is clear thatP.I.E. format is being used.

I need a review to make sure I comply with the teacher’s instructions on the following discussion post I wrote:

 P
 Growing up withimmigrant parents who both come from different cultures can be difficult,especially living in America. It was hard for Malaka to find her own identitywhen she couldnt relate to the people and things around her. But I didntfeel like a real American I spoke with an accent and had a weird name.(Gharib 54) Malaka struggled to feel accepted around her peers and atschool.  
I      Malaka feelsas though she does not fit in at school, with friends, and even her familysometimes. And even the things she sees and hears reinforce this idea. Myfamily didnt look like the ones on TV. (Gharib 26) Having to adapt to both ofher parents’ religions (her mother being catholic and her dad being Muslim), aswell as her ethnicity as a first-generation American. When she did try to fitin at school, she was called whitewashed and a poser for liking white peoplesstuff. I was taught from an early age that everything white people did wasbetter (Gharib 72), says Malaka. The most important question you could askwas what are you (Gharib 65). For Malaka this question was hard to answer asshe was completely lost trying to figure out her identity. …I was ethnicallyambiguous. And whitewashed. So I hang out with anyone who would have me…(Gharib 80). Malaka sounds desperate to fit in and doesnt find a way to do ituntil later when she got the Most Unique label. Surprisingly, it gave hervalidation.

     Malaka waslooking for validation for a long time, even without realizing it. And it camefrom outside. Not from her parents or relatives but from people she feltrejected by all this time. Even amongst minorities, I was a minority. (Gharib79)
And this was the moment of truth for Malaka. It helped herto start a long way of overcoming challenges that she will be facing later inlife. It was the moment of realizing her own identity and accepting herself. Ialways felt like an outsider.  A misfit.But maybe that was totally Okay. Maybe thats what made me cool.(Gharib 85)